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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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There is no denying the fact that changing is crucial for everyone to improve their mindset.
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 an argument that other
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 believe that
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. on one hand, the majority of
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 hate the idea of ​​changing or even replacing habits.
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, they dislike going out of
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 zone and that
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 and habits.
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affected
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their thinking about
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with
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, some
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 think the modification is essential for our community. It is
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 whether in education or
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career
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, the new generation
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 our knowledge, and
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 society. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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the Impact
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 of
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 on social media in order to get an informed society and provide an effective way for our community.
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task response
Your essay covers both sides of the argument, but more specific examples would strengthen your points.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow between paragraphs by using more connective phrases.
general
Make sure to proofread your essay to fix grammatical errors and enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which provides a good structure to your essay.
task response
You have addressed both viewpoints and expressed your own opinion, capturing the essence of the prompt.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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