Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In some countries, the minimum legal
age
for driving is different. In some Use synonyms
countries
you can start driving from 16, in Add a comma
,countries
another
only from 20 and they have explained Correct pronoun usage
others
this
rule. But sometimes people think that to improve Linking Words
road
safety is to increase the minimum legal Use synonyms
age
for driving. Use synonyms
From
1 side I agree, but Change preposition
On
from
another – disagree.
I agreeChange preposition
on
,
because I think that Remove the comma
apply
start
drive from 16 Wrong verb form
starting
its
too early. Correct your spelling
is
In
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At
this
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age
person only start to take shape Use synonyms
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as in
in
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an
adult
and cannot yet be a full-fledged Replace the word
adulthood
road
user. Because of hormones, Use synonyms
reaction
can be slower, Add an article
the reaction
a reaction
you
can be distracted, but on the Correct word choice
and you
road
, you need to have mind sharpness, and be concentrated on Use synonyms
Use synonyms
road
.
But I have arguments Add an article
the road
why
I disagree. Change preposition
for why
Firstly
, in my Linking Words
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it’s okay to drive from 16 years oldAdd a comma
,view
,
if rules decrease car/motorcycle power. I think Remove the comma
apply
this
solution is better than increasing the driving Linking Words
age
. In Use synonyms
this
way, a person will start driving from being younger, Linking Words
it
means will get more Correct pronoun usage
which
experiences
and after some time can drive Fix the agreement mistake
experience
B category
cars Add a hyphen
B-category
safely
than Correct quantifier usage
more safely
person
without driving Add an article
a person
experiences
.
Fix the agreement mistake
experience
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Last
argument why I disagree is that in my view, the government can find much better solutions for Change the article
The last
safe
on the Replace the word
safety
road
. One of the best, I think, Use synonyms
its
Correct your spelling
is
increase
bills for using mobile phones. Replace the word
increased
Biggest
part catastrophes are happening when Correct article usage
The biggest
driver
Fix the agreement mistake
drivers
distracted
or just don’t look Add a missing verb
are distracted
on
the Change preposition
at
road
. In Use synonyms
this
situation, the minimum driving Linking Words
age
Use synonyms
don’t
have any impact.
In Change the verb form
doesn’t
conclusion
I can say, that Add a comma
,conclusion
less
crushes do people, who have a lot of driving experience. Their reaction is faster, they know what they need to do in extreme situations. And as everyone knows, the best way you can get experience is to try Change the quantifier
fewer
this
activity. So, in my view, the best way to increase safety is to decrease cars' power and make much bigger bills for Linking Words
rule breaking
.Add a hyphen
rule-breaking
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