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Public transport should be funded by the government so that it can be free for people who use it. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

As the days
are passing
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 by, the population is
incrementing
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increasing
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 over the globe and so
do
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are
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 their necessities.
Therefore
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, I agree with the statement that the state should step in and provide facilities like transport to its
people
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 for free or at a low cost. In
this
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 essay, I will highlight a few points to prove my view of
this
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 before my conclusion is reached.
To begin
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 with, if the government decides to launch free public transport, a great many citizens would prefer to
use
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 it,
instead
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 of their personal
vehicles
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.
This
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, in turn, will alleviate the
traffic
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 on the roads and there will be hardly any
traffic
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 jam incidents.
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, deck passengers will reach their destinations on time and everything will be well managed.
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, the Chinese government introduced affordable metro trains in their metropolitans for travelling within the city, to tackle heavy
traffic
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.
Therefore
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, cheap public commuting will benefit both the state and its
people
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.
In addition
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, with the increasing
use
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 of public locomotors, there will be a limited number of
vehicles
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 like cars and motorcycles on the roads.
Due to
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this
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, air pollution will decrease,
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, the community will remain safe from the hazardous effects of harmful smoke and fumes which come out of the combustion cylinders of
vehicles
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.
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, in a city like Mumbai, its authorities encourage
people
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 to
use
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 public transport in place of their own to eradicate the thick smog which causes breathing issues among its citizens every year in the
month
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months
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 of November and December.
To sum up
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, introducing the idea of providing free public commutes to society will not only solve the problem of
traffic
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 jams but will
also
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 keep
people
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 safe from the dangerous effects of toxic derivatives generated by fuel which is used by
vehicles
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. In my opinion, having to
use
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 a free commute is a basic right every taxpayer should have.

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task achievement
Work on making your ideas in each paragraph more developed and detailed. Provide more explanations to strengthen your points.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your essay flows smoothly by using more linking words and phrases (e.g., however, therefore, in addition).
introduction
Your introduction is clear and presents your main idea well.
relevant examples
You provided relevant examples that support your arguments effectively.
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