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Nowadays, there are many reasons for environmental pollution. What are the causes and solutions?

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Nowadays, many
people
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unhealthy
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activity
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 and eating
junk
food
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because
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because
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health
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 their fit
body
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activity
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body
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 exercise and yoga to maintain
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body
 and they can become fit and fine but they can eat
junk
food
 and obese
day
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day
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 with, most
of
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people
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 like pizza, burger, pasta, etc.but these are not good for
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health
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junk
food
are
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 like poison for
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health
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eaten
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food
then
 they can fit.
Hence
, most
of
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people
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the people
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 even
then
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young
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children
childrens
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children
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 are
also
 obese
day
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day
.
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Because
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Because
 they can eat
junk
food
 and
doing
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do
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 unhealthy activities .when we can take more
exercises
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, running and yoga
also
 to take fit our
body
. For
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-many
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children
childrens
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children
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 are
loss
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eat
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food
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asleep
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.
Secondly
, most
of
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people
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then
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mobile
phones
they
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 can
also
unhealthy
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 for her. Most
peoples
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people
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 are using mobile
phones
 for only
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 work like google information,
assignment
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assignments
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 etc. But most commonly
people
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mobile
phones
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social apps like
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WhatsApp
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whtsapp
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,
instagram
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, telegram etc. They can
loss
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 her future and they
loss
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 her eyes because
phones
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 brightness
are affect
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 her eyes. And can't good her
health
. I think we can use
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mobile
phones
 for only
main
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 purposes and use
it
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them
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 well.
for example
- many youngsters
are used
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the
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mobile
phones
 for gaming and they can play
day
 and night
this
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her
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hailness
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harness
haleness
. In conclusion, the possible reasons are we can eat
junk
food
 so we can need more
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exercise
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 and yoga for our
health
 and
used
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their
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our
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 mobile
phones
 only for
emergency
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 and important work so we can fit and healthy and
doing
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do
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 unhealthy activities so, we can sick and
this
 is very hazardous for her.
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  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gases
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • ecological balance
  • air quality
  • waste management
  • biodegradable
  • environmental regulations
  • fossil fuels
  • ozone layer
  • climate change
  • biodiversity
  • industrial emissions
  • contaminants
  • ecosystem
  • public transportation
  • deforestation
  • recycling programs
  • eco-friendly products
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