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The plans illustrate
Garange
Correct your spelling
Garage
 park in 1920 when it was
first
 established and in recent days. Overall, the park experienced various changes including the construction of a
water
 feature, an amphitheatre, a rose
garden
 , a cafe and a children's play
area
 by demolishing the
fountain
, stage and pond for
water
 plants.
To begin
 with, the
fountain
 used to exist in the centre of
Garange
Correct your spelling
Garage
 park where the two entrances in Eldon and Arnold avenue were in the north and south in 1920.
However
, a rose
garden
 with surrounding seats is constructed and replaced the old
fountain
 today.
Also
, on the west side of the
fountain
 was the stage which was for the usage of musicians, and two seating areas in 1920. Now they have demolished making an
area
 for a new-established amphitheatre for concerts.
Moreover
, in the southeast of the
fountain
, there were a glasshouse and a seating
area
 which now they are substituted by a
water
 feature and an extra entrance in the underground for parking space.
Similarly
, the previous rose
garden
 and pond which was for
water
 plants in the northeast are substituted by a cafe and an
area
 called a children's play
area
. It is worth mentioning that the rose
garden
 in the southwest is destroyed and remained empty today.
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