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In many countries today, crime novels and TV crimes drams are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV show are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

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 is what everybody has an eye for these days, and it is evident, which is why these crime
books
 and TV shows are getting popular nowadays.
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 them famous.
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 regarding these lethal shows and
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getting famous is the demonstration of the real stories, which helps people to visualise the actual situation, which not only provides them with
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fun but
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 of what
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 the other hand, it warns people to get into
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, while watching crime videos, I try to predict what
next
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 of illustrations and
books
 depicting violence. It will not only make you
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 people more but
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 will bring negativity around you. Watching these shows are good in limit only, out of it, they will start haunting you.
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, one of my friends used to watch these shows every day, and after a period of
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 she started to look at everyone with suspecting eyes. She
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 consider everybody a criminal and that
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 her personal and professional life. In a nutshell, watching
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crime videos or shows and reading
books
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 professional and personal life.
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