Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Whether newly constructed buildings should be controlled by the
government
or
freedom
for the
financers
to architect their own design,has been a point of controversy between the stakeholders and the
government
.Some
believe
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in the
freedom
of architecture while I would advocate the idea of state-approved
construction
mainly because of safety reasons. On one hand,
financers
are of opinion that they should be freely allowed to design their own buildings and the sanctions should be minimized.
Moreover
,newer concepts could not be introduced to the world if these sanctions keep restricting them from trying something out of the box.
For
example
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skyscrappers
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skyscrapers
were possible due to the creative thinking of the architects.
Financers
believe that the fresh ideas that
leads
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lead
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towards sophistication in the field aren't possible without
freedom
.
On the other hand
,the importance of monitoring and standardization for the safety of the people can not be ignored as well.No matter how great an idea may be,risking the lives of the citizens could not be allowed.
For instance
,
the
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developing countries where state control over new
construction
is loose,have to face multiple casualties each year due to the
demolision
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demolition
of buildings with sub-standardized materials and impractical designs.Unnecessary sanctions should not be levied but strict monitoring of new
construction
must be done or
lives
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of its citizens would always be in danger.
Financers
and
government
may never be on the same page about
this
issue of
freedom
to build.Even though,criticised by the
stakeholders
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stakeholder's
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government
must fulfil its responsibility to monitor and standardize the new
construction
to avoid losses of precious lives.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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