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Some people think that computers are more important for study while other think that teachers can taught everything to students .discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #computers #study #teachers #students
For nowadays
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 computers are one
of
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the
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important
impotrant
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important
 tools
in
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 education purposes
such
 as books and science articles.
For instance
, the whole information that people need in any
areas
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, the
computer
 could provide in
second
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a second
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 and
this
 is
progress
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the progress
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 of humanity.
Also
, there
are
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 so many
option
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 in order to write a short text or a big report and
computer
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the computer
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however
, it is a great right to consume the information but pupils
in that case
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 cannot get
a
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feedback without a
teacher
. In
this
 essay, I would to discuss two points of view.
First
 of all, today the
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civilization
civilazation
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civilisation
 has got plenty
online
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 courses on
computer based
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 useful for
study
,
also
, homework from schools and universities moving to websites. Resultantly, computers getting more
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important
impotant
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important
 to
study
,
nevertheless
, some
of
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educators
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the educators
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 still prefer to work or
study
on
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paper-based
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paper based
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 subjects. In my opinion, the whole
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achievements
achievement
achivements
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achievements
 in
computer
 technology could be very helpful for
disables
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persons
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people
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, who would like to
study
 from their homes and that will be
great
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a great
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 opportunity for them.
Teacher
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 are looking for new books and making some new theories in education methods in programs
such
 as
power point
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powerpoint
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 that
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assists
asists
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assist
 to make
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a presentation
the presentation
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presentation
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presentations
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.
Additionally
, it is vital to have
communitacation
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communication
 with
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a teacher
the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 from other regions and
sharing
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 with own
experience
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experiences
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. To sum up, to have
a offline courses
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an offline course
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 with a
teacher
 and make some actions
in
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computer
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the computer
a computer
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 would be great,
thus
, doing
all
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it all
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combine
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 will lead to
good
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a good
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result
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results
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for
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in
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study
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the study
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