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Influence of human beings on the worlds ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of diversity. what are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? what solutions can you suggest?

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The disappearance of
species
 has become a matter of great concern in
this
 world with the involvement of people through their destructive activities.
This
 is mainly due to extensive deforestation, but it can be controlled by making stringent rules and regulations. Amongst t he major factors, cutting off forests is perhaps the most
significantly
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 contributing element.
This
 is because the lack of space to build new houses
to have
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 led to deforestation. In India,
for example
, the construction of flyovers or roads causes 60% of the
extinction
 of
species
 by cutting trees in numerous amounts.
Besides
, innumerable use of private vehicles leads to a loss of diversity.
That is
 to say, vehicles emit dangerous gases which are harmful to individuals and waste
ofdisposed
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disposed
of disposed
 in water causes water pollution.
Consequently
, many aquatic
species
 are on the verge of
extinction
such
 as coral reefs and Dolphin. Turning to solutions, imposing stringent rules and regulations is probably the most effective way to deal with
this
 situation.
This
 would hopefully control the
extinction
 of
species
 by following environmental laws among people.
Moreover
, there is
also
 an urgent need to aware people of biodiversity using social networking sites: Whatsapp, YouTube, Instagram and many more. By doing
this
, they become aware of the benefits of
species
 that are on the verge of
extinction
. In conclusion, despite the fact that the destruction of
species
 is one of the major concerns we are facing today, if appropriate actions are taken by governing bodies and individuals, it can be solved to a greater extent.
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