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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

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Advertising plays a crucial role in our lives. Based on some viewpoints, advertising is a trigger in
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 a world where
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 are mostly consumers.
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, there are
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 who believe that advertising is in vain and kind of a distractor for them. They opt to buy a
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 only to meet their needs. The world is imbued with numerous ads trying their own bests to induce us to buy a
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. Media, where everything goes viral, is a suitable place for clever marketing ploys. Giant firms put their minds on luring
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 to purchase. The ads for their products are shown on TV, on billboards around the city, on social networks, and so forth.
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, free testers in enormous malls or even some persuasive slogan may tempt
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 to try the
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 once. “Don’t Panic; it’s Organic.”
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 is the slogan of a well-known restaurant that, via wordplay, entices you to try organic foods.
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, due to the over-infusion of ads worldwide,
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 disregard them as soon as they come across one. There was a period of time when
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 were distributed brochures by various companies in order to be convinced to buy a
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.
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, in weaving through
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’s perspectives, it is believed that brochures,
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instance, these days are no longer an issue and are going to be placed in a recycle bin by
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 as soon as they flick through them. To recapitulate briefly, I contemplate that
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 are no longer manipulative. Advertisements ought to have something to say unless
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 would neglect and count them as something ordinary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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