Violence in playgrounds is increasing. However, it is important that parents should teach children not to hit back at bullies. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is true that violence in school playgrounds has become more common. There are two different parental approaches to dealing with

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issue: one is to teach

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not to

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back but some insist it will only encourage

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bullying. According to the proponents of the

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view,

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who do not stand up for themselves will continue to be easy targets for bullies. Trying not to promote violence, they maintain that the most effective way to deter bullying is to

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against it.

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, learning to defend themselves can help

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overcome their phobias.

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, knowing one can

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might reduce the sense of inferiority,

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helping them gain higher self-esteem, a valuable train for an adult.

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tough experience gained in childhood can teach them to be resourceful than relying on outside help.

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, teaching

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to hit back at bullies can really backfire. For one thing, it can negatively impact their behaviour at home in the sense that they might feel comfortable using physical abuse towards their siblings as well.

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, responding to violence in the same way

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of coming to a compromise can lead to the development of the same aggressive behaviour which will pass on to adulthood. As we live in a civilized society, the world will be a better place if more people learn to negotiate than

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learning to

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against school bullies can bring a number of psychological benefits, I feel that teaching

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to be pacifists can play an important role in reshaping the whole society.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

265 words

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Violence in playgrounds is increasing. However, it is important that parents should teach children not to hit back at bullies. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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People often think about creating an ideal society, but most of the times fail in making this happen. What is your opinion about an ideal society? How can we create an ideal society?

The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment.

Marriages are bigger and more expansive nowadays than in the past. Do the advantages of this overweigh the disadvantages?

Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?