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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficulty. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university #difficulty
Nowadays, both the destitute and the wealthy find the possibility to study
into
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 educational institution
difficulty
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. In my point of view, I totally agree that
study
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 these days is too
siphisticated
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sophisticated
 for both the poor and the rich.
This
 topic will examine the agreement with the topic and two arguments will be given. On the one hand, destitute people, who are not smart enough to earn a scholarship, have
troubles
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 with tuition fees because the education cost at top universities is increasing every day.
Therefore
, poor individuals are forced to start a university they are not huge fans of regardless of their wishes. Namely, tuition fees at the top universities today are about
from
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fifty to sixty thousand dollars per year.
Thus
, needy humans are not able to pay.
On the other hand
, wealthy people
who
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are able to pay more
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that
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 fifty thousand per year and money is not a problem for them at all.
However
, almost all universities have essential entry examinations and they could be complex due to the high demands on students.
Consequently
, riches would not support wealthy a person to start their dream educational institution.
For instance
,
the
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Harvard University has a
multitue
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multitude
 of assignments a
candidate
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candidates
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 are forced to submit before the application form will be checked by the workers of
the
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Harvard University. To sum up, riches could be helpful to start many academies,
nevertheless
, deep knowledge is a mandatory part of the education process and the lack of knowledge will make a number of
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troubles
problems
troublems
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problems
 for the candidate to get higher education.
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