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Countries should provide enough food for their own people and therefore lessen exportation of food abroad, if needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is an argument that finding new energy sources
such
 as oil and gas in untouched areas is important. Some
people
 could think of the advantage that comes from it
such
 as stabilization of world energy consumption and improving new studies of unexplored
places
 that human never know before. Meanwhile, others think that it is essential to produce new alternative
resources
 like bio-oil and bio-gas so
people
 would have more benefits
such
 as eco-friendly life and a healthy environment. In
this
 essay, I would discuss both sides. I strongly agree that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
To begin
 with,
people
 should explore new
places
 for finding new
resources
of
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for
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 oil and gas. They will do more research which leads to improved new studies of unexplored
places
 that humans never know before. When
people
 could find new
resources
, of course, it will support the stabilization of the world's energy consumption.
By contrast
, others think that it is more essential to produce new alternative
resources
 like bio-oil and bio-gas so
people
 would have more benefits
such
 as eco-friendly life and a healthy environment.
Instead
 of exploring new
places
 which can cause devastating land,
people
 can experiment with recycling or reusing materials
such
 as waste things and garbage. It will not cost much money and could be easier to make while they can revitalize nature at the same time. These would lead to more prosperity and good life for human beings as well as animals and plants. To conclude, I strongly agree that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. It would be better if
people
 could preserve nature not
devastating
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 new land
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