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Some people think that government should invest money in wildlife projects and protect them.Other people think it is better invests money in other projects.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The graphs illustrate the total
value
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 of three different
goods
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 (fuel, food and manufactured
goods
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) in
million
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dollars
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 exported by one nation in a five-year period (2000-2005). Overall, fuel saw a considerable decline, manufactured
goods
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 had a fluctuation in
its
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their
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exportation
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, whereas food saw a stabilised
exportation
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 across the
years
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. With regards to the
value
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 of exports, there was a moderate
decreased
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 in the money obtained from the
exportation
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 of the products by the year 2002.
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, from approximately 300,000
million
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dollars
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 in 2000 to nearly a half
million
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dollars
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 lower two
years
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 after. By 2003, there was a dramatic increase in the amount of money generated, from 250,000
million
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dollars
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 to 350,000
million
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dollars
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, and continued to increase gradually across the subsequent
years
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. Looking at the types of
goods
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 exported, fuel
exportation
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 continued to see a significant decline
across
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over
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 the
years
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. From around 450,000 in 2000 to more than a half less by 2005.
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, manufactured
goods
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value
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 fluctuated
along
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over
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 the
years
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. Most shockingly, there was
a
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apply
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stability in the
value
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 of food exported. The figures continued to be below a significant proportion in comparison with other products exported,
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, less than
a
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apply
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50,000
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dollars
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