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Some people think that government should invest money in wildlife projects and protect them.Other people think it is better invests money in other projects.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The graphs illustrate the total
value
 of three different
goods
 (fuel, food and manufactured
goods
) in
million
dollars
 exported by one nation in a five-year period (2000-2005). Overall, fuel saw a considerable decline, manufactured
goods
 had a fluctuation in
its
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exportation
, whereas food saw a stabilised
exportation
 across the
years
. With regards to the
value
 of exports, there was a moderate
decreased
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decrease
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 in the money obtained from the
exportation
 of the products by the year 2002.
Thus
, from approximately 300,000
million
dollars
 in 2000 to nearly a half
million
dollars
 lower two
years
 after. By 2003, there was a dramatic increase in the amount of money generated, from 250,000
million
dollars
 to 350,000
million
dollars
, and continued to increase gradually across the subsequent
years
. Looking at the types of
goods
 exported, fuel
exportation
 continued to see a significant decline
across
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over
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 the
years
. From around 450,000 in 2000 to more than a half less by 2005.
Furthermore
, manufactured
goods
value
 fluctuated
along
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over
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 the
years
. Most shockingly, there was
a
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apply
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stability in the
value
 of food exported. The figures continued to be below a significant proportion in comparison with other products exported,
that is
, less than
a
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apply
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50,000
million
dollars
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