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The world's air pollution levels are rising year on year. What should humanity do to counter this problem?

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It is a matter of common knowledge that environmental issues getting more and more problematic every year. The world's
air
pollution
 figures are increasing annually,
this
 is a problem which needs to be solved in
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 short term since it represents a danger to the world's population. In
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 I will discuss the ways humanity can reduce
pollution
 tendency. To start with, the main reason for
air
pollution
 is vehicles, and its fume,
people
 need to start replacing them , with much more environmentally friendly transport, like subways , scrolls and tramways.
People
 need to realize that it is rational to give up their own comfort for the sake of the future.
Besides
 that now
people
 have the opportunity to buy electric cars like Tesa and Hybrids. The same
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 to,airlines which do harm the environment, and ,personally I think that quantity of flies over the world needs to be reduced.
For example
: Planes should be accessible only for travelling over the continent.
Second
 of all, deforestation should be stopped immediately, trees and forests need to be protected by governments and organizations. Cutting the trees, cause the reduction of oxygen in the
air
, and it is the main reason, for widespread illness in society. The
people
 should make some kind of activity,
first
 to encourage the community to fight against deforestation and
secondly
 to acknowledge the young
children
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importance of environmental protection.
However
,
people
 should start recycling the products they use which can have a beneficial effect. In conclusion, there are many ways humanity can deter
air
 from
pollution
, like recycling, or arrange activities against deforestation and changing their choice of transportation.
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