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In the future, nobody will buy printed news papers because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the
last
 few
decades
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 online versions of
paper
books
 and newspapers gain popularity day by day, especially among the modern generation because of the opportunity to read them without paying. Despite
this
, it will never be the only way to read because there are lots of benefits that it gives to the reader and I will advocate
this
 statement in
this
 essay.
First
 of all, information read from
the
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paper
books
 not only stays strong in
mind
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the mind
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 for a long period of time
,
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 but
also
 increases the ability of creatively thinking. According to scientists, it is all about our perceptions,
that is
, the human brain receives a lot of different data every day and in order to remember them safely, you need to use the so-called "anchors", these can be notes in a book, cover and overall amount of pages. In witness of
this
 fact in 15 different countries in Asia students of social directions conducted a survey that showed that a major percentage of people prefer
paper
books
 to digital versions because of their harmlessness to vision.
Secondly
, scientifically proven that people enjoy reading
paper
books
. British scientists conducted a chemical analysis of the
books
 and found that the pages contain hints of vanilla scents, as well as grassy notes.
For instance
, one experiment among college students in the US, Slovakia, Japan, and Germany found that 92% of participants preferred
books
 that they could hold, touch, and flip through whenever they wanted. All things considered, I can make a strong decision that
paper
books
 and newspapers are much better than online ones and have more benefits for readers
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