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large number of deaths are caused by road accidents. Why do so many road accidents occur? Make recommendations that would help to reduce their number.

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The number of
accidents
 happening on the roads is increasing, and so is the number of deaths reported in those cases. Some
people
 may put the blame on
drivers
 who go over speed limits as well as drug users. In order to eliminate or mitigate these issues, governments should implement strategies which make
people
 behind the wheel more conscious when driving.
To begin
 with, most fatal
accidents
 happening on the roads are speeding-related. The vast majority of
drivers
 are not following speed limits according to the area they are driving causing serious car crashes with human casualties.
Moreover
, police have reported that most individuals causing car
accidents
 are usually under the influence of drugs that affects their primary senses. To exemplify,
people
 who drink or ingest illegal substances do not have the same fast response when doing well-adquieredacquired activities
such
 as driving, their vision may become blurred and the spacial context sense is
also
 reduced. Reduction of these fatalities happening on the road is everyone's task,
however
, the government should implement better strategies to avoid them. An option that has been functioning in high-transited areas is the introduction of speed cameras that record car velocity and fine those who go over the limit. What is more, police should spend more time doing random breath testing on busy nights when
accidents
 are more prone to occur. If
drivers
 learn to be more cautious when driving and to respect the laws, fatal
accidents
 will be reduced. In conclusion,
people
 being killed on the roads are because
drivers
 are not respecting speed limits and abuse illegal substances. To prevent those
accidents
 to occur, the government must act and implement better strategies that help
drivers
 to become more aware of their responsibilities when inside motor vehicles.
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