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Is is sometimes said people should be encouraged to get married before the age of 30 as it is best for society. do u agree or disagree?

#people #age #society
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 present world, the importance of being married is constantly on the rise, especially before middle
age
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,which is better for the person's
life
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 and community . my opinion, I totally disagree with idea that should motivate youth to get married at an early
age
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 , for many reasons I will mention in the following paragraphs.
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, most men at
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 young
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 could be not totally prepared to commit to their wives.because of a lack of experience in responsibility,especially young men they can not handle the new responsibilities that arrange in their new
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 , and
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, an increasing number of divorces with who wedding at youth, for that it is not a good idea,because will effect on society
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, the desire and goals of males in recent times are increasing, and marriage will make it difficult to achieve them,
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 , people in the philippine poor county .
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, males need to immigrate to other county have a better economy to enhance their lives and that led to living his wives for months or years so time as result, the husband spends most of his time trying to be successful and building his
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 to approve his income for the future,for that he could not focus on marriage
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 needs, that led to increase divorce which is affecting on community. to sum up,they are many reasons why should not encourage young men to marry before 30 of old
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. according to what is mentioned in the paragraphs I disagree with the agreement. I recommend that the government teach some gatelines to people before marriage .
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