More and more animals are on the verge of extinction and othera are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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animals are
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of
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list. Its
reasons
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that
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the deforestation and hunting of carnivores
wildlife
. There are many several
reasons
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the essay
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paragraph.
To begin
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of
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extinction
of wild pets are hunting and erosion. Due to
this
, many animals lose their natural habitat and put their lives at risk. Many people
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animals for their food.and most
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people killed the beast for
their
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production of luxury goods like bags, shoes, coats etc.
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, the
government
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nationwide
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campaign
compaign
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to knowing mankind about the importance of conserving
wildlife
. For epitome- one of
the
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humankind should
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of
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trees and endangered
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wildlife
.and many carnivores are starving decease.
Secondly
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population
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there is a high
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demand for
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demand for
land and wood. The forest lands are cleared to make it suitable for various activities like agriculture, timber extraction, construction etc. Poaching is another activity which puts the
life
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of many wild pets in danger. A number of
creature
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are killed
illegal
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for various purposes. So, the
government
takes the action against the humans and
government
also
should not run many
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campaigns
compaigns
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campaigns
.
for instance
- while evolution is always a reason there are manmade
reasons
also
, namely two, mainly global warming and merciless killing. In conclusion, human activities
such
as denuding and hunting are the major
reasons
for the
extinction
of
wildlife
. By the
government
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strict law that
stop
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or at least
reduce
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logging and poaching,
wildlife
can be saved from the border or
extinction
.
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