More and more animals are on the verge of extinction and othera are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?
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wildlife
. There are many several reasons
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To begin
with, the main cause of edge
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of
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extinction
of wild pets are hunting and erosion. Due to this
, many animals lose their natural habitat and put their lives at risk. Many people hunting
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animals for their food.and most Correct article usage
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should launch the
nationwide Correct article usage
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campaign
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to knowing mankind about the importance of conserving Correct your spelling
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wildlife
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humankind should Correct article usage
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the
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wildlife
.and many carnivores are starving decease.
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demand for
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life
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creature
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government
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campaigns
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campaigns
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also
, namely two, mainly global warming and merciless killing.
In conclusion, human activities such
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of wildlife
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reduce
logging and poaching, Change the verb form
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wildlife
can be saved from the border or extinction
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