A huge amount of money goes towards children's education. In some countries, the government pays some or all of the costs. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Nations
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all
the
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globe have as a priority
the
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children’s
education
,
therefore
, countries
pays
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almost all the
cost
of
this
important issue. In
this
essay, I will explain the advantages of assuming the
cost
of
the
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education
in their government budget that, clearly, will affect the future of their citizens.
First
of all, when a country assumes to pay most of the
cost
of young
people
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people's
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education
the benefits will be for all
society
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of society
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. By assuming a high percentage of their budget on
education
, the quality of
this
will improve,
because
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of that, the system
education
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of education
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will be better. Another important advantage is with more money to spend, the nations can have more schools,
hence
, the access
of
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education
for
children’s
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children
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highly
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growth.
For instance
,
a children
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children
a child
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with
a
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good
scholarship
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scholarships
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will achieve better skills for the future and to construct a better
society
.
On the other hand
, spending money
in
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on
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only one issue will leave
least
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budget for other important matters,
such
as
,
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health or employment.
Nevertheless
,
education
is the base of
the
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society
,
thus
, if the state assumed
this
cost
, in a long term, the country would have professional highly qualified and competent.
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,
professional
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professionals
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that
have
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good
education
have more
option
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options
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to have betters skills to cope
the
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future and
being
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a contribution to the nation. To conclude, spending more money on
education
may be the best option for a nation, thinking in a long term.
Therefore
, people will have more opportunities and a better construction
or
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of
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their
society
,
this
will significantly improve the different
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of a country,
such
as
,
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quality of life,
education
system and equality.
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