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Some people believe that Internet users should be able to express any kind of opinion online. Other people feel that governments or the companies that own websites should put limits on what people can say online.

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Nowadays, many
people
 use the
internet
 daily. the
internet
 can
allow
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allows
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people
 to express any kind of opinion unlimited.
In contrast
, some
people
 feel that should be limited
internet
 users whit government or companies that own websites. I will discuss both of the mentioned opinions and expiree why I feel that both said it true. Restriction of freedom while using the
internet
 limit personal privacy, which is unacceptable in modern society because the
internet
 is a free platform and
people
 can share all opinions and expressions and they can speak as long as they want.
On the other hand
, due to the rise of technology,
although
 the information is spread out of control, they may get some fake news or negative expression that makes someone get hurt. For these reasons, some
people
 would like governments or companies that own websites to limit what users say online.
Moreover
, there are some countries and companies that trying to limit rules on the
internet
 platform
such
 as Iran and China, they do not want
people
 to get in touch with freedom will in the
internet
 world. In conclusion,
people
 from different parts of the world should respect one another's use of the
internet
 to discourage negative expression that causes trouble for others. Even though the
internet
 is still a great way to communicate and find information, the future lies in focusing on the present and developing new values that will make a positive difference for humanity based on the examples we have been given.
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