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Modern technology is now very common in most workplaces. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

Nowadays, there is a multitude of technologies which could support individuals in their workplaces. In my point of view, modern processors have been changing processes as
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, there are some drawbacks related to modifications which are forced to be considered.
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 essay will examine how gadgets have changed workflows and their demerits. First and foremost, modern technologies
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 as gadgets, artificial intelligence, and automated workflows might be beneficial by saving time and automating routine parts of many jobs.
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, it could bring companies
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 impact like artificial intelligence on factories
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 could do some parts of labour work faster.
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, a person could be tired or ill.
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, the speed would be slowed down.
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, a machine is never tired and could work not only full-time or shift-time, but the whole year.
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, many processes
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 be automated from the beginning to the end
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 people cannot be confident that computers
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 make correct decisions.
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 are able to replace some manual work of individuals.
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, computers still cannot make crucial decisions correctly because of a lack of emotions. To illustrate, if an employer of a company hires or promotes a candidate,
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 on many factors
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 as leadership, teamwork, and others.
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, a computer will choose only by a statistic which has been stored in it by persons.
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, computers and artificial intelligence modify the way
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people worked before by reducing routine tasks. Unfortunately, drawbacks might be awful and people are compelled not
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 about human factors which are significant for successful companies.

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task solution
Plan first. State your view quickly and list 2-3 main ideas you will discuss.
language
Use simple, direct sentences. Check grammar and spellings. Avoid long, strange phrases.
coherence
Use linking words to show flow, like firstly, also, but, however, as a result.
support
Give real, clear examples for each point. Explain how they show your idea.
grammar
Check small errors: 'gargets' should be 'gadgets' or 'tools'; keep tense right.
content
The essay shows the idea that tech can save time and may not tire.
structure
Attempts are made to talk about both good and bad parts of tech.
language
Some examples are used to back up ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • software applications
  • high-speed internet
  • communication
  • collaboration
  • geographical boundaries
  • remote work
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • skill gaps
  • job displacement
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence
  • dependency
  • security risks
  • data breaches
  • cyber attacks
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