Nowadays, distance-learning programs have gained in popularity (those teaching programs that involve the use of written materials, videos, televised lessons, and the Internet), but some people argue that courses can never be as good as those taken by attending a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The advent of the Internet has changed the
ways
that people live their life and complete work, so an increasing number of
students
are considering distance
education
, rather than traditional studying
ways
in school, helping them complete a degree. I believe that online
education
could achieve the same educational outcomes as traditional lessons,
although
it
also
has some drawbacks. Distance
education
has numerous means to help
students
grasp
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of every lecture and widen
knowledge
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, and even in some cases, the learning effect of it is better than traditional
ways
, because the distance between
teachers
and each student is the same, which means every student has
opportunity
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to ask their lecturers questions. Unlike traditional classes,
teachers
may have to ignore some
students
who sit in the back row.
In addition
, it is
also
very convenient for
students
who do not fully understand the concepts their
teachers
teach in courses, since they could click the pause button and replay the video until they completely grasp relevant
knowledge
. Another benefit associated with distance-learning courses is that
students
could communicate with other scholars from
other famous university
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around the world,
although
they just stay at home.
This
chance is of great value to
students
because
this
opportunity enables them to draw inspiration and talk about
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better
ways
to solve problems in their studying
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everyday communication with each other.
On the other hand
, it is true that online
education
lacks enough interactions between
students
and
teachers
,
although
there are many interactive tools for them to use in virtual classes, possibly leading to the situation that
students
find it hard to digest
knowledge
and are reluctant to attend lectures
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. Some
students
who lack self-discipline,
they
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may play
some
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computer games or watch
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important sports contests, when they should have attended online classes. In conclusion, online courses have more benefits than its drawbacks.
Students
could benefit from a better understanding of
knowledge
and communication with those from world-famous
university
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,
although
this
way may
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not have enough interactions and is not suitable for
students
who lack self-discipline.
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