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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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"Melody is a gift of god", my teacher said once. I believe
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 absolutely true and life without melody is like a meal with no salt. Tune has been our life partner since it was 'born'. It helps
people
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 in a number of ways,
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 as reducing
stress
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 levels, making them entertaining and so on. But I agree that the most essential function of
music
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 is lessening
stress
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. Nowadays
stress
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 is getting more problematic for
people
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 in society.
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stress
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 is the response of our body to external pressure in order to adjust and overcome it, it causes some trouble if it exists longer.
Stress
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 is caused by many factors,
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, moving to a new country, illness, and breaking up that
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 in activity.
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 of
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, we have psychological problems,
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 as depression, and isolation. Fortunately,
music
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 is able to protect us from
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 dilemma. It makes us relaxed and calm when we listen, due to the fact that
music
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 sends signals to our brains. The findings of the survey that was conducted by the Mental Health centre show most
people
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 usually listen to
music
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 when they are stressed out. They say that because it ameliorates the bad situation. Some
people
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 argue that
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 not the most essential function of
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, whereas making
people
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 energetic and entertained must be the most important thing in listening to
music
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.
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,
music
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 cannot make us happier to live, can it? To conclude,
music
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, which is our helpful life partner, can support us to escape from hard situations.
This
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 is miraculous, is not it?
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