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In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so? Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times, many
people
 seldomly relate with their
next
-door
neighbor
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 as it was in the olden days. I agree
to
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this
 assertion because
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the difference
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difference
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 in personalities and career paths are seen to be the major cause of
this
 trend.
Firstly
, Most
people
 living together in the same compound who has different jobs may hardly have something to discuss together.
In other words
,
neighbors
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 with different goals and values may not appreciate or relate perfectly with themselves.
This
 is because the demand of their duties may be enormous and require them to go out early and come back late thereby giving little or no room for friendly interaction especially if there will be little or no value addition. An instance
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this
 is the working lifestyles of those working in the banking sector who often resume 7a.m and close very late at night.
Such
 an individual may prefer choosing a Bossom friend at the office level.
Therefore
, only
people
 with like minds have
tendency
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a tendency
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 to flow along with One another
Additionally
, individual personality is an integral factor
to
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considerbefore
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consider before
 extending a hand of friendship. Some
people
 are Introverted in nature thereby making it burdensome to rapport with other
people
 in the same house. Moreso, it helps
people
 to debar acquittance from encroaching into their privacy. Moreso,
ability
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 to draw the line of relationship with
people
 in the same vicinity tends to limit future problems that can arise from
next-door
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a next-door
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neighbor
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neighbors
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.
For example
, most youngsters in Ado Ekiti hardly allow
people
 into their neighbourhood into their
apartment
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apartments
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because of eminent difficulties that may follow. In conclusion, I opined that keeping
neighbors
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 at
arms
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 length is likely to checkmate the kind of relationship shared with one another thereby helping individual
to
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maintain their privacy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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