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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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The reality of
modern
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 world is that supermarkets sell both local and imported
food
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 and other
products
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. Some people argue that these shops should sell
products
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 that are made in their own local areas. And should not be selling foreign country foods. Personally, I disagree with the statement that only local
products
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 should be available and imported ones
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, as both are essential. It is important to reach
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 in
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 situation, so my essay will extensively explain reasons to support y opinion based on real-life examples.
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 with, it is not a secret, that the majority of shops are full of foreign items and unfortunately, people tend to purchase them rather than purchasing country-made
food
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. One of the results of globalization is that many folks have numerous misconceptions about national
products
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, so they prefer buying imported
products
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instead
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.
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,
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 can be seen in Japan where imported goods have become more popular than traditional, local produce, eroding people’s understanding of their own
food
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 traditions. Another preoccupying thing is that the country’s population is deprived of fresh
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 as they buy imported foods more
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that
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 their own.
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, foreign
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great
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 number of preservations to prevent those from deforming which
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 detrimental effects on human bodies.
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, if supermarket stop selling imported items that will be awful. Imported items help the economic development of the country. Interestingly,
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there are several countries where most of the population are immigrants.
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, Canada is one among them. Where almost more than fifty
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 of residents are foreign nationals. It is essential for them to have an access to their home
food
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 in Canadian stores. \ In a nutshell, there should be an appropriate percentage of goods to be available so that it either does not or very
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 the domestic merchandise or maintain an adequate import and export so that it does not affect the economy of the country.
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