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Some people think that robots are very important to human's future development, while others believe they are dangerous and negatively affect society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Technology develops very fast nowadays. We can’t live without technology now.
Robot
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The robot
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 is a high-level technology which is in development at
this
 moment. But we still have
robots
 that can do basic work
such
 as packaging on the flow-line, housework etc. I believe in the future,
robots
 can do everything that humans can do. Even better than humans. As we know, on social media we watch many kinds of
robots
 created in different areas.
Robots
 can play Go and win against the human Go player;
robots
 can speak and talk to
people
. They look like they have their own thoughts. In my area, I like to draw and want
drawing
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the drawing
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 to become my job. But now artists have a huge competitor which is AI drawing, it can make beautiful paintings in different styles and meet different requirements, just input the keywords you want. Maybe in the future,
people
 no longer need to learn how to draw anymore, they may simply write the keywords,
AI
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 will help them to draw the image in their head. Just like AI drawing, some
people
 benefit from it, but artists will lose their job. Some
people
 are afraid of
robots
, it may be because of
the
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 job.
Robots
 can replace many
people
,
people
 will lose their value,
they
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and they
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 may be forced to do other jobs they are not interested in. But think in another way,
robots
 may do all the work,
people
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and people
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 will have more time to spend with themself and their
family
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families
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. Maybe in the future, we don’t need physical things and eat food anymore, we will live in a big supercomputer, and the
robots
 will manage the whole system.
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