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In many countries, the widespread use of internet has given people more freedom to work or study at home instead of traveling to work or college. Does the advantage outweigh the disadvantage.

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 mind,but in my humble opinion,it is more
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 than
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advantage
 because without
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 conservation, life becomes uninteresting,and
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 doesn't give significant
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an unhealthy
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 type of life. It is true,
internet
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 makes our route easier,but particularly online study without quality
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I think so the teacher,
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the tutor
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 must sense
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students
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students
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however
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 they understand or
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. The experience shows that people
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the
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 from covid-19. As far as I imagine,online working and studying are dangerous for
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the economic
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,when people go out less,will spend less money and it increases unemployment . Working and studying at home would be
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 only in
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 when workplaces or colleges are in other
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 and impossible to go
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workplace
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a workplac
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workplace
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 most it specialists work from home
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internet
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