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Somepeople spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Some individuals tend to live in the places
next
 to the
place
 where they were born.
This
 essay describes the reasons why
people
 do not change their area of living as well as the benefits and drawbacks of living in one region.
Firstly
, the main reason for
people
 to live
next
 to places where they were born and grow up is that their close relatives
such
 as family and friends
also
 live there. The connections that a person builds while studying are very strong, and it is
also
 not that easy to build new relationships when you are an adult in a new location. My situation illustrates it very well as I recently moved to a new country and it took me a while to build new friendships.
Also
, it is very difficult to live very far away from my parents whom I am very close to.
Secondly
, the reason to stay at a
place
 where you live the majority of the time is that you know everything there very well. You know the everyday processes, the language, and your education suits the
place
 meanwhile
people
 often have to learn a foreign language when they move or even to renew their education.
For example
, if you work as a doctor in your country and you have a proper education, you will still have to study again if you decide to move to Canada. So there are clear merits of not moving to another location, which
are
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 strongly connected to the reasons why
people
 do not do
this
. The
first
 merit is that you are close to your family and can always have help from them, help them, or just communicate with your relatives. The
second
 benefit is that you do not need to obtain special skills, everything is straightforward because you were there from childhood.
However
, as a
drawback
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 a lack of growth can be highlighted. When you open something new for yourself, it always has a good impact on your life. In conclusion,
people
 tend to stay where they were born and grow up because of the relations they have there and because the more familiar environment makes life less complicated. But
on the other hand
,
people
 may lose a lot of life opportunities staying in one
place
.
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