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the best way which increasing the price of petrol to solve the problems associated with the environment is not exact because the effective solution to handle these issues is to develop technology and an education system.

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Some believe that the ideal response to the present environmental issue would be to increase the price of gasoline for all private automobiles.
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 would have a measurable
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, I believe a more comprehensive approach is preferable. One may argue that raising gas prices would have a discernible
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 is because vehicle ownership is on the rise around the globe in both developing and industrialized nations.
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, suppose the expense of daily commuting surpasses the benefits it would provide to a family already having trouble making ends meet each month. In that case, that family may choose other methods of transportation
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, the number of personal vehicles would decrease as people adjust to higher petrol prices and opt for more affordable transportation, including walking, bicycling, carpooling, and public transit.
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, in turn, lessens CO2 emissions, one of the significant factors in the world’s environmental problems.
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, a more substantial impact might be achieved by other policies that do not unintentionally target the less fortunate. Since most tiny levies would not deter upper-class individuals, it is doubtful that the solution above will have the intended
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, governments should consider everything from deforestation and disposable plastics to industrial fossil fuel usage. Governments must deploy a wider range of strategies, including higher taxes, stricter laws, and educational campaigns, to effectively and sustainably tackle these concerns. As demonstrated, addressing a single factor, like fuel cost, will have a negligible
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, while seeking a broader environmental strategic approach would be more beneficial. In conclusion, even though increasing gasoline prices might reduce vehicle emissions to some extent, I feel that evenly allocating government resources to combat several fronts is a more effective strategy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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