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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

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The plans illustrate a port in 2000 and how it is now.
Overall
, several changes have been made, making the area more convenient. The arrangement of some spaces has been changed. There are some new facilities that have been added to Porth Harbour.
Also
, there is
one
 substitution, the disused castle has been replaced by a hotel. In 2000, the Marina was located on the north border of the port,
however
, it has been switched place with a fishing boat spot and now it is next to the café and shops areas, which have been built almost in the middle of the plan. There was only
one
 shower and toilet area on the site before, on the left side of the Marina and above the car parking, but now another space has been constructed between two car park areas on the right side of the main road. The prior version of the Porth Harbour had
one
 dock on the north portion of the site, next to the public beach, but today another
one
 has been set up on the left side of the old dock, close to the fishing boats. On the south-eastern of the port, there was a disused castle. Today, it is substituted by a hotel. To access the hotel, a sub-road has been constructed, and a public beach that once was for everyone to use is specifically for the hotel’s guests now.
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task response
Ensure to mention all the major changes in the plans. Some modifications, such as the specific locations of the café and the shops or any new developments between other areas, were somewhat generalized. Providing more detailed comparisons will strengthen the task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance transitions between descriptive segments to guide the reader more smoothly through the changes from 2000 to the present day. Using transitional phrases can help improve flow and clarity.
task response
The essay describes the changes in the harbor effectively, noting significant alterations like the replacement of the disused castle with a hotel and adding a second dock.
coherence and cohesion
A logical structure is maintained, with the description organized chronologically from 2000 to the present, aiding coherence.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraphing divides distinct groups of changes into separate sections, contributing to the essay's clarity.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multi-purpose building
  • recreational facilities
  • maritime safety
  • leisure destination
  • tourism-focused
  • infrastructure improvements
  • pedestrian promenade
  • landmark
  • expanded roads
  • transport infrastructure
  • industrial use
  • cruise ship terminal
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