More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Augmentative savage primates are on the utmost of evanescence and others are on the imperilled chart.
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precarious problems. On the one hand, there is no scepticism regarding the fact that by virtue of human actions, numerous species of wild organisms are struggling to survive
such
as
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forbidden hunting.
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to say, masses hunt
animal
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animals
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for
recrational
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recreational
activity and have made it a way of living.
Moreover
, we are residing in a contemporary world where new school Individuals feel the cause of avoidance of the wild
animals
is deforestation which is done to facilitate the expansion and development of urban areas.
In other words
, wild creatures lose their natural habitat and
this
puts their lives at risk.
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, The New York Times reported on 20 March
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2019 and found that approximately 89 percent individuals
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Bangladesh said
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most of the
animals
pose a threat to
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lives and property, they are often killed.
On the other hand
, there are two enforceable solutions that can exterminate
this
perilous problem. First and force most, the administration must pass the law in the parliament against illegal hunting.What I mean to say,
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the law is passed against
such
practice,
then
it would restrict people from killing wild
animals
.
Furthermore
, it is apparent that the state and the public can take to undo the damage done to wildlife.
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the regime should launch nationwide campaigns to sensitise people about the importance of conserving wildlife.
For example
, a recent survey conducted by Queen's University of Canada during the year 2021
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found around 92
percent
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multitudes of India believed killing
animals
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rate will
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after the
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steps.
To conclude
,
this
essay discussed the major causes which were responsible for
this
situation and
also
stated the sustainable solutions to eradicate
this
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pernicious
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problem
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