More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem? Problem and solution

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A large number of wild species are on the brink of extinction and many others are on the endangered list. There are several reasons for the
wildlife
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crisis.
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, there are
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certain steps we can take to resolve
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problem. One of the major problems affecting the existence of wild animals is the destruction of their natural habitats. Habitat influences biodiversity deeply. Those natural places are destroyed because of deforestation, environmental pollution, too much urbanization and so on, which not only affect animals' homes but
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their food cycle, atmosphere and reproduction process. Manitoba,
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province of Canada, where many natural resources that are significant for
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have been ruined since the
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. Thousands of acres of grassland are gone, almost 75% of ancient forest in
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region has been cut down,
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% of
wetland
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the wetland
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is destroyed.
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, the necessary growth of
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and their life cycle is disrupted causing
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endangerment. Some protective measures,
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, should be taken to improve the situation.
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and foremost, the government should arrange an aggressive campaign nationwide regarding environmental issues to raise awareness among the public. People will know how natural damages done by them can cause habitat loss and the disastrous effects it brings about.
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Additionally
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they will understand the importance of
wildlife
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surroundings, and eventually, make an effort to avoid
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damages
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.
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Besides
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the government ought to allocate more budgets
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protecting
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wild creatures. If these preventive actions are implemented properly, the extinction caused by human activities can be fudged. To conclude, the principal cause of
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extinction is
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habitat loss for various reasons.
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, in order to prevent the loss some important measures should be obtained.
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