Children today find it’s difficult to concentrate or pay attention in schools. Why do you think causes this problem? What do we need to do to solve this problem?

Nowadays, it's difficult for students to concentrate or draw
attention
at
school
. The problem of not having
attention
at
school
is caused by the playful behaviour of
children
and can result in decreasing the level of learning. The possible solution to
this
issue will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin
,
this
generation of students is really clever and talented. They don't pay
attention
to less important or those subjects which they have no passion for.
Moreover
,
for instance
, the teachers of a
school
in Canada found some girls who were absent from their math class in the backyard, while they were trying hard on designing a robot for a robotic competition.
Therefore
, they want to think and use their brain more for subjects which they like and have advantages for them.
First
of all, on the one hand, the administrators of high and elementary schools can organize some types of classes in which students can choose their own beloved courses. But absolutely there should be held some essential classes
such
as mathematics, science, literature and chemistry only in primary
school
due to the reasons that these are initial courses which a student has to know.
On the other hand
, there should be some prizes or wards for those
children
who act perfectly in all their classes.
Furthermore
, teachers, administrators and
also
parents can encourage
children
to perform their best in their studies and tell them the great impact of their hardworking.
For example
, research by a diligent student at the University of New South Wales in Sydney has displayed that an 11-year-old girl got her wanted stuff after attempting so difficult in a liked class, which she wanted and
this
action leads to better and harder work for her in the future. According to what has already been discussed in the above paragraphs, the issue of lack of concentration and
attention
at schools is caused by a lack of their parent's
attention
and can result in a decline in the
children
's learning.
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