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Friendships can be very meaningful and special, but also very complicated. What are the qualities of a great friend? What are some things that can weaken a close relationship over time?

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A group of
people
 opine that
friendship
 is very important in our life. we cannot think
any
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of any
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 day without
friends
 and it depends according to their
relationship
 and their characteristics, so I will represent
qualities
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the qualities
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 of good
friends
 and factors that
affects
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affect
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 the
relationship
, with precise examples and backup my view.
First
 of all,
helpful
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the helpful
a helpful
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 character is
the
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a
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 crucial part
for
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of
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 selecting
friends
. which help to create
endurance
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an endurance
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relationship
. without
this
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these
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characteristics
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,characteristics
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friendship
 is difficult, because most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
 want
to
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apply
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friends
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friends'
friend's
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 support
,
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apply
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 when they pass
difficult
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a difficult
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situation
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situations
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.
For example
, when I was suffering covid-19, my friend Shahid was beside me all the time, despite knowing the risk.
Secondly
,
jolly minded
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persons
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people
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 are excellent for selecting
friends
, because they can easily cope
any
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with any
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 situation, which
their
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is their
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 positive
sites
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site
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.
As a result
, because of few changed to conflict with them.
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, if
people
 say something unintentionally
with
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to
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friend
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a friend
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,
he
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they
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 never critically think about
this
 matter which make
long
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a long
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 distance between
friends
.
Although
,
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apply
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 the
friendship
 bond is more powerful between human
being
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beings
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but
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apply
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sometime
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sometimes
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 it can be complex in different causes, cheating is
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one
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on
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one
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 of the greatest bad habit, which discrete
relationship
,
even
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and even
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 disconnect their relation
also
, not only that but
also
 communication. When
people
 do not communicate properly
then
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the
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relationship
 gradually detached. In conclusion, it is obvious that
,
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friendship
 is
important
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an important
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 part
in
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of
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 our life so we should
nurtured
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nurture
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this
 bond to create more endurance even we should create our mind to
cecrifice
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sacrifice
, which
help
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helps
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to
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us to
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 survive the
friendship
for
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apply
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forever.
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