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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

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Living abroad where a foreign
language
 is spoken can cause various social tackles , as well as practical ones. I personally perceive that living in another country is significantly taxing especially when it is related to your
language
.
To begin
 with, it is considerably noticeable that
language
 has been a basic way for humankind in order to interact with each other and
this
 is the reason that it should be an international
language
.
However
, there are some countries that do not pay attention to learning the international
language
. In
Italy
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 almost all of the community speak Italian. If you are a student in Italy, you will face some crucial obstacles.
For instance
, if you go to a supermarket to buy some fruit ,you should always bring someone with
yourself
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 who can speak Italian.
Moreover
, imagine that if you are invited to a party, you will not have even the chance to start a conversation.
As a result
, you feel lonely or depressed. Plus,
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the latest study that was conducted at the University of Tehran, it is revealed that in order to get along with a new atmosphere in a new country, you should be familiar with the culture.
In addition
, being familiar with a novel culture is not possible without engaging with people. So, you feel that you do not belong to that society.
For example
, when I travelled to Spain for business even though it was just for a week I felt down in the dumps
,
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 because I had no one to speak to or hang out with.To conclude, being communicated with people is really essential and preponderant for every human being and
language
 is the only way. So living in a foreign country is considerably frustrating if the citizens do not understand your words. I myself deem that learning an international
language
 should be obligatory in every modern world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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