some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Technology has completely changed our
life
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and
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a wide variety of
choices
. There are many reasons that why these
choices
come to us and I believe that these
choices
are greatly beneficial.
Internet
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provides us with many
choices
in different areas
such
as business, school and
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our
life
. Companies can have online meetings with foreign partners, teachers and students living in different countries can communicate with online services, and with media people are always up to date about what happened around them; they are always being informed by the latest information.
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,
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media
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, I have recently informed that in my city, victims
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survived
from
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the earthquake and
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, need blood donation,
therefore
, I donated my blood. While in the past, information was not accessible as easily and quickly as today.
Also
, they spend a lot of time
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the response
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their letter without the internet. Now, various
choices
are available to us to be informed and live more comfortably.
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,
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technology
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we have
to
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many
choices
and it is positive
,
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because these options have made our
life
more comfortable and enjoyable.
For example
, we can use automated
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cars to transport comfortably and easily, without being tired of driving long hours and reach
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to destination with the cars’ intelligent navigation systems. Another example is that in my childhood, we had just two TV
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with boring programs.
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, we are not restricted
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watching just TV channels as less as
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past, now with online platforms, we are able to watch online movies
such
as Netflix.
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, we can enjoy our
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by
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such
various options. In conclusion, these available
choices
can bring
comfortability
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and
enjoy
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in our
life
, and give us a lot of information that we need.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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