some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Technology has completely changed our
life
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lives
bring
a wide variety of Wrong verb form
brought
choices
. There are many reasons that why these choices
come to us and I believe that these choices
are greatly beneficial.
Internet
provides us with many Add an article
The Internet
choices
in different areas such
as business, school and medias
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media
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affecting
effecting
our Correct your spelling
affecting
life
. Companies can have online meetings with foreign partners, teachers and students living in different countries can communicate with online services, and with media people are always up to date about what happened around them; they are always being informed by the latest information. For example
, by
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in
media
, I have recently informed that in my city, victims Correct article usage
the media
whom
survived Correct pronoun usage
who
from
the earthquake and Change preposition
apply
injured
, need blood donation, Add a missing verb
were injured
therefore
, I donated my blood. While in the past, information was not accessible as easily and quickly as today. Also
, they spend a lot of time to receive
the response Change the verb form
receiving
of
their letter without the internet. Now, various Change preposition
to
choices
are available to us to be informed and live more comfortably.
Additionally
, by
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with
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the technology
technology
we have Add a comma
,technology
to
many Replace the word
too
choices
and it is positive,
because these options have made our Remove the comma
apply
life
more comfortable and enjoyable. For example
, we can use automated driver-less
cars to transport comfortably and easily, without being tired of driving long hours and reach Correct your spelling
driverless
faster
to destination with the cars’ intelligent navigation systems. Another example is that in my childhood, we had just two TV Correct pronoun usage
our faster
channel
with boring programs. Fix the agreement mistake
channels
However
, we are not restricted for
watching just TV channels as less as Change preposition
to
the
past, now with online platforms, we are able to watch online movies Change preposition
in the
such
as Netflix. Therefore
, we can enjoy our free-time
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free time
by
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with
such
various options.
In conclusion, these available choices
can bring comfortability
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comfort
enjoy
in our Replace the word
enjoyment
life
, and give us a lot of information that we need.Submitted by wenglish995 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite