some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Technology has completely changed our
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and
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a wide variety of
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. There are many reasons that why these
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come to us and I believe that these
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are greatly beneficial.
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provides us with many
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in different areas
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our
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. Companies can have online meetings with foreign partners, teachers and students living in different countries can communicate with online services, and with media people are always up to date about what happened around them; they are always being informed by the latest information.
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media
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, I have recently informed that in my city, victims
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survived
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the earthquake and
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, need blood donation,
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, I donated my blood. While in the past, information was not accessible as easily and quickly as today.
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, they spend a lot of time
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the response
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their letter without the internet. Now, various
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are available to us to be informed and live more comfortably.
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technology
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we have
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many
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and it is positive
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because these options have made our
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more comfortable and enjoyable.
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, we can use automated
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cars to transport comfortably and easily, without being tired of driving long hours and reach
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to destination with the cars’ intelligent navigation systems. Another example is that in my childhood, we had just two TV
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with boring programs.
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watching just TV channels as less as
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past, now with online platforms, we are able to watch online movies
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by
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various options. In conclusion, these available
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can bring
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in our
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, and give us a lot of information that we need.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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