It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is argued that making risky decisions is essential for humankind in their working place and private lives. I believe that there are more obvious benefits of challenges in
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than any disadvantages
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might bring. It seems to me that the major advantage of taking risks is
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its influence
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on our self-development and new possibilities in
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of all, challenges can build up
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self confidence
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which is the basis of personality.
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trait of character helps us to set up plans and achieve different goals.
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, if you are confident, you will use all opportunities in order to get
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a promotion
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in your career.
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, young people who are
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to receiving feedback and tackle
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challenges
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to be more successful.
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, despite the advantages above, there are some drawbacks including making wrong decisions which might lead to health problems. It is
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that, risky situations make provoke uncertainty in
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. People might have not
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a stable
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which has a detrimental impact on both professional and personal sides.
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relationship
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relationships
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between
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couple
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or colleagues can be spoiled because you might seem
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an untrustworthy person.
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, permanent nervous situations can increase adrenalin hormone which negatively influences
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people’s health. The fluctuations of hormones can be dangerous for
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immune system
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protects us from different deceases. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I think that
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the benefits
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of self-developing and trying to apply new possibilities in
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outweigh
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the disadvantages
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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