In some countries, young people have become richer, healthier, and live longer, but they are less happy. What are the causes? What can be done to address this situation?

nowaday
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a
number
of
people
think that even though young
people
have achievements like being wealthier ,healthier and living longer , they are still depressed. It is believed that there are many reasons for
this
phenomenon,
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it should be tackled by a
number
of solutions. There are two compelling reasons that make the younger generation become richer,healthier and live longer.
First
, there are more dramatic changes in modern life like higher workloads and higher incomes which attract young
people
. They almost work hard without spending time on
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leisures
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or travel .
For example
, a
number
of
people
work in global companies with high pressures to be promoted by the company.
Thus
, they don't have enough private time to take
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rest at home.
Second
, a
number
of
the
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youngsters
were affected by becoming wealthy through social media.
This
influence makes
youngsters
think more and do more jobs to spend assets as they can. somehow, these assets might not bring happiness
to
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them.
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, some
of
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riches
richer
richers
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the richers
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owned many properties and money when they got old.
However
, some of them could not be blissful because nobody shared these successes with them. Some measures ought to be taken to resolve these prospective issues
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youngsters
should think carefully about their desirable goals which make them happy.
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they could balance between work and private life.In fact, the government implements
annual
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holidays
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policy for the public.
People
can have time to stay with their family and friends which
help
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helps
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them stress out and create more happiness. A
number
of
youngsters
can take part in art courses like painting ,
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and handmade
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handmade
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and handmade
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crafts.
Furthermore
, there are
also
spirit courses for
people
who seek satisfaction in their spirit. In conclusion, while
the
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youngsters
become richer,healthier and live longer, they could forget some true values of life they should have, it still has various solutions for them to balance it.
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