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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions?

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Soaring
crime
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 among today's youth is one of the major problems cities overcome nowadays.
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 the culprit might be the lack of opportunities, there are many short-term and long-term solutions to reduce
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 rates. On the one hand, young people are living in an uncertain and unstable world, where high rates of unemployment are commonplace.
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, especially in the developing world, young adults are discouraged by the high competition rate among newly graduated. Coupled with the high cost of living,
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 may lead many of them to commit crimes in
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 to feed their families.
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, in a recent survey of young offenders in New York, many of them cited poor
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 prospects as their reason for offending. Another cause of the
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 rate surge might be the high level of dissatisfaction experienced by city youth. Many cities are overcrowded, bustling and run down and
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 pushes some folks to
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.
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,
governments
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 should enact two different types of solutions. In the short term,
governments
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 should offer free
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-training programmes along with counselling to
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 seekers in
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 to inspire young adults to continue seeking a
job
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.
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, a recent training scheme for the unemployed in Berlin has resulted in a 25% reduction in youth
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. Over the long term,
governments
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 and city leaders should work to make cities
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more livable places, by creating more green areas, reducing taxes on low-income brackets and developing better infrastructure for city inhabitants. To sum up,
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 few
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 opportunities come with widespread dissatisfaction with the living conditions causing many urban youths to commit crimes, there are many
governments
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 can do in
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 in
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 to prevent and reduce
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 rates.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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