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people use things in a short time then throw them away. What are its causes and what are its problems? What could be done to address this issue?

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Nowadays, a significant number of
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 are using stuff in a short time and
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 throwing it away. In
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 essay, I describe the possible causes and problems and address the solutions as well. 
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, these days, the majority of kids are growing up in a well and wealthy conditions unaware of the
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 other children are suffering from.
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, they do not realize the value of
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 they own and
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 of using or even giving them to someone else they just throw them away.  Sadly, many kids are experiencing poverty while other children do not consider
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 condition and are ungrateful. 
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, kids in modern countries are in a much better situation rather than in
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-world countries, so, they never understand the value of stuff. To solve
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 problem, we can teach them at school, to not throw away anything they have or at least help somebody else.
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, we cannot ignore the effect of social media on
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's behaviour, since, the human being is able to have the access to other's life, we can surely say by being influenced by social media,
people
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 are just buying
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 and when they are satisfied they just let them go.
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, just randomly buying stuff can seriously damage the environment as many
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 we use are made of plastics. One of the solutions to solve
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 problem is using influencers and obligating them to warn the public about the environment. In conclusion, a lot of
people
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 use
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 in a short time and
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 throw them away. In
this
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 essay, I mentioned the causes, problems its makes and solutions.
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