In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies

There has been a rapidly growing trend in some nations to encourage high school graduates to travel and get
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the real world by travelling for a year or
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employed for jobs that they want to be hired in future. Young
people
by working or travelling can learn the value of money and improve their knowledge about how elderly
people
live, but there are
also
disadvantages that can
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the
one
hand, some
people
support taking a gap year.
Firstly
it can benefit young
people
's personal development, which is
one
argument in
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they learn to value cultural variety through travel to other nations, where they will be exposed to various cultural and social standards,
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will improve their cultural knowledge.
Secondly
, еhey can change how they behave in front of their parents
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because through the
experience
they will understand how much their parents give them, and immediately begin to appreciate them.
On the other hand
,
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and working are not without
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drawbacks for young
people
.
One
issue is that spending extra money may result from vacation.
In other words
, the travel budget may be substituted with future college expenses. Unfortunately, without a strong academic background, it is impossible to have a respectable job or develop a successful career.
For instance
, many global corporations would not consider resumes from applicants without a university degree. Without a doubt, a gap year can negatively impact a student's career if they lose their academic concentration. To recapitulate what was said earlier,
this
experience
has it is own negative influences
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the future work of students, but if they effectively use
this
time, they will gain
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they would not find in any other situation
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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