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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the impacts on society and families?

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In modern society, most people have a bachelor's degree and even get a master's degree in order to get the occupation that they want.
Thus
, a number of people consider having their kids later on.
Accordingly
, I will discuss in
this
 essay that there are various reasons why it happened and how it can affect our communities. The main reason is that the age for marriage is getting higher than before all over the world, especially is pivotal in advanced countries like Japan.
This
 is because they focus on their career or ability and they
also
 try to make an effort to receive recognition from others at offices on behalf of weddings and taking care of their offspring.
In addition
, if people have one or two
children
 after getting married, they will be able to spend the amount of money on their education or living expenses like food or clothes for their
children
.
For instance
,
however
, they can go on a trip to other countries with spouses whenever they want and buy luxurious items regardless of price if they give a birth baby later. On the one hand, even though they can more concentrate on themselves and enjoy their life for quite a long time, it can bring about a negative influence on our communities. If they spend their time freely with their spouse, they will change their thinking, and which does not want to have
children
 anymore because they may feel satisfied with their life without their offspring.
As a result
, the rate of birth is getting low every year more and more. In the future, there will be able to lack
workforce
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 and the economy is getting worse in all countries. In conclusion, many public has
children
 later on because they want to develop themselves in their field or area and they
also
 want to live enjoying their life without any stress that
children
 can give them.
However
, it ti undeniable that it can give some demerits to our society
such
 as loss of workforce and damage to the economy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career advancement
  • professional stability
  • medical advancements
  • individualism
  • personal fulfillment
  • financial stability
  • demographic shifts
  • reproductive technologies
  • emotional maturity
  • birth rates
  • aging population
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