Some people believe that there should be a law which prevents young people under the age of 18 being outside after midnight. Do you agree or disagree?

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The phenomenon of enforcing strict policies to limit
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at home after midnight has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as
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issue in question may be, I totally disagree with the idea that using the
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to control the behaviour of young
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. Of all the reasons why the
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should not be used to restrict adolescent freedom, probably the most significant one is that establishing a
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cannot really limit
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's actions.
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will do anything they think is right or they want whether the
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most countries have laws prohibiting
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from killing, some
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still murder others to get want they want.
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, the government will need a lot of resources to surveil
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is useless. Another reason that should not be overlooked is that the right to be outside after midnight should be applied to everyone even if he/she is under 18. Security and safety cannot be an excuse for controlling young
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and depriving them of their liberty. Being too strict with the children may cause an irreversible result.
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, Many kids grow up with too much control, they will accrue some negative emotions without a method to release them. When the pressure is too high for them, they will get mental illness.
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, parents should teach their children what should not do and why cannot do it, not set up a rule to control them. Under
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line of thinking, it seems to me that children are more likely to be developed healthily
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if
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does not exist.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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