More and more people now own cars. What are the problems associated with an increase in the usage of private cars? How can these problems be solved?
Cars
are one of the best industries in millennia. Even with the technological advestments, cars
leave behind damage that cannot be controlled. there are two problems
due to
cat usage: air
pollution
, and global warming. In this
essay I will invent a solutions for these issues and I ill clarify the main problems
.
Climate change is one of the biggest international problem, and in this
essay all the focus is with mainly problems
: air
pollution
, and global warming and what is the relationship between these issues and cars
. Firstly
, Air
pollution
is a term indicate to unclear air
that probably can effect people health. Moreover
, using car is develop more pollution
due to
the gases that come out of the car, which affects the ozone layer. Secondly
, global warming is a term indicate to gradual increase in the earth's temperature generally due to
the greenhouse effect and other pollution
.
Although
, there are hard efforts and international cooperation to reduce these problems
by creating other transports. One of the biggest solutions is Advanced culture of cycling, inventing electronic cars
to avoide the negative impact, and cars
based on renewable energy. Furthermore
, a new idea are related to nutritions that reduce using Vehicals by physical exersises. For example
, if it is a short trip go by walking, such
as going to supermarket near to the house.
In conclusion, there are several problems
related to usage private car, through that there are also
a huge amount of ideas to reduce the side effect, and the most useful solution is try to go by usnig other transports like bicycles.Submitted by shahad.san966 on
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task achievement
The introduction sets the tone but can be improved for clarity. Clearly state the main problems and your thesis statement. It's also essential to avoid spelling and grammatical errors for a polished introduction.
task achievement
Provide more detailed examples and explanations to support your main points. Currently, the essay lacks depth in terms of evidence and reasoning, which would strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Work on transitioning between paragraphs and ideas more smoothly. This can help improve the flow of the essay and make it easier for readers to follow your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central focus, and avoid mixing different ideas in one paragraph. Stick to one main idea per paragraph.
task achievement
You address the main problems related to private car usage: air pollution and global warming, and propose some solutions.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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