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People in 21st centuries have better quality of life rather than previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The importance of
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 of living for
human
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a human
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being
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 was always debatable and now has become more controversial. Some masses believe that comfort is better than
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era
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. While others reject
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21st
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the 21st
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century
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have
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 better
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 than
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the previous
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 and
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 leading to a logical conclusion.
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 but the most preponderant
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 stem from the fact that due to advancement in
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 facility and better infrastructure , human being
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 able to commute the distance freely in less time frame which was not available in
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 year’s. Another pivotal aspect of the
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 is that educational platforms are visible online to everyone in the
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century
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Learner
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 does not have to visit to take admissions.
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, they can access their syllabus online and learn without
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 their attendance offline in institutions. Even though
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today's
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 educational field become so
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 and provide short
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hour’s
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 for their students. Learners can attend their
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 anytime and choose
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 according to their
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 which will add
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further
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 professional
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 in the current
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century
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people
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 have more accessible resources of food without going to
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 states and
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countries
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.
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,
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 can enjoy
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 of food in their native place
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 just
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the
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people
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favour of
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, there are some pitfalls that negate
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 and
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 is that due to the industrialization banking system more
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. Thefts can use just
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 information
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 the person and steal all the money
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that
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 is why some
people
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 are against
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. To recapitulate, according to the aforementioned above
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the conclusion that
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 of the living standard in
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century
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 are many and instrumental.
Nevertheless
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, its potential drawback should not be overlooked either.
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