Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Living abroad can cause some social and practical
problems
because of using a foreign Use synonyms
language
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while
both of these Linking Words
problems
can be important at the same level. I agree with Use synonyms
this
matter that both of these Linking Words
problems
are important Use synonyms
as well as
each Linking Words
one
.
On the Use synonyms
one
hand, living in a foreign Use synonyms
country
can cause some social issues like finding new Use synonyms
friends
. Use synonyms
One
of the most challenging activities for Use synonyms
people
who immigrate to another Use synonyms
country
is finding new Use synonyms
friends
. Because of speaking Use synonyms
as well as
native speakers, it is so hard for Linking Words
people
who speak Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
language
as a second Use synonyms
language
. They cannot say the things that they want as fluently as they think. Use synonyms
For example
, Linking Words
one
of my Use synonyms
friends
in high school came from Iraq and wanted to take part in our community because she was alone and did not have any Use synonyms
friends
she could not speak with us as fast as we could and took a long time she could make friendship relation with us.
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On the other hand
, Finding a job is hard for Linking Words
people
who do not speak their mother languages. Use synonyms
One
of the practical Use synonyms
problems
for immigrant Use synonyms
people
is finding a job to pay their costs. For those Use synonyms
people
who want to work with a second Use synonyms
language
, there are some challenges and stress. Because they cannot speak about so many aspects Use synonyms
in
their workplace. So they may not find a job which has a good salary.
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of
However
, there are some Linking Words
people
who do have not many issues with speaking in a foreign Use synonyms
language
. Some Use synonyms
people
who prepare for their immigration before going to another Use synonyms
country
do not have many issues. When these Use synonyms
people
learn the Use synonyms
language
of the the Use synonyms
country
to which they want to go, they will be Use synonyms
convince
themselves. Wrong verb form
convinced
For example
, Linking Words
one
of my classmates started learning the German Use synonyms
language
before he went to Germany and had a really good experience because he was accepted by Use synonyms
people
and society in Germany. Use synonyms
However
, I disagree with Linking Words
this
statement because there are a few Linking Words
people
who had Use synonyms
such
an experience.
In the bottom line, Linking Words
although
there are some Linking Words
people
who did not have many serious Use synonyms
problems
with living in a foreign Use synonyms
country
, there are many Use synonyms
people
who experienced a hard period in their social and practical life.Use synonyms
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task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph supports the main argument by providing clear examples and explanations. While you've provided examples, they could be more specific and relevant at times.
coherence cohesion
Work on developing a more structured argument. Use linking words and phrases more effectively to signal shifts in ideas, comparisons, and contrasts.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which provides a framework for your argument.
task achievement
You attempted to use examples to support your main points, which helps to strengthen your argument.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example