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Some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the hosting nations. Others believe that these events are mainly a large unjustifiable expense. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued whether the
countries
 are able to present their qualities perspective. I agree that it would be a useful chance to show their
countries
, while there are some drawbacks in terms of expense. On the one hand, hosting an international sporting event would show a big
country
’s strength. In terms of finance, the government should fund to
construct
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 of new facilities, so a
country
 with a great economy can afford a lot of money to establish some stadiums.
For example
, in 2008, the government of Beijing as the host of the Olympic games cost money to build Bird’s Nest in Beijing and the Water Cube.
In addition
, the
countries
 that hold international sporting events can present their own culture. Visitors and players are more likely to experience and be attracted by the powerful culture of a
country
 as a host.
For instance
, China held Olympic Winter Games that show traditional cultures,
such
 as Chinese calligraphy, and the mascot panda, in both ceremonies and ordinary games.
On the other hand
, Building new constructions indeed would be spent much more
expense
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expensive
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 for a
country
 as international sporting events of the host.
For some
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Some
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 small
countries
, perhaps cannot afford the expense and even utilize or occupy the fund from other aspects including infrastructure, and education.
BesIdes
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, it can take a negative influence on the
country
 that they are under great pressure. In conclusion, Holding international sporting events can help
countries
 to show both their soft and hard power.
However
, that
country
 should pay much attention to their real conditions including finance and stable environment and so on.
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