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some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together, To what extent dou you agree of disagree wtih this opinion?

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Music
 has a vital importance in every
people
's life. There is much debate over whether bringing
people
 of diverse cultures and ages together can be thanks to
music
 which is a good way. I strongly believe that
although
music
 has a specific feature which
address
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to
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anyone,
people
 have
negative
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 opinion against other
people
 who belong to another culture and age group. Some
people
 highlight that
music
 is a common language which everyone understands. When
people
 hear a
song
, they can like the
song
 regardless of looking for what is the
song
's language.
Thus
,
this
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special
speacial
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special
 face of
music
bring
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brings
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 various
people
 who
has
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have
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 different cultures and ages.
For example
, in
Eurovision
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the Eurovision
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 competition, one
votes
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vote
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to
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for
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 the
song
 according to how
song
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the song
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make
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makes
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feel
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one feel
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 them. At the end of the race,
song
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a song
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 which is more connective among
people
 will win the race.
In addition
, in every new year, almost all over the world is always
played
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playing
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same
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the same
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music
 which is 'Jingle Bells'.
On the other hand
, there
are
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 prejudice
amongst
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among
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 every culture and age.
Therefore
,
music
 is not enough method for bringing
people
 together. To illustrate, I and my colleague who is older than me and Arabic generally
listen
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 similar songs,
however
, we don't prefer being in
a same situations
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same situations
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 because of our wrong guesses about each
others
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other
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. In conclusion, some
people
 say that
good
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 way of
connect
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connecting
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people
having
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with having
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 distinct
culture
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cultures
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 and age
group
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groups
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 is
music
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through music
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, yet it is not sufficient for
this
 condition since I completely agree with every
people
 has a prejudice which
avoid
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people
 get together. So
music
 cannot be
a
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an
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 adequate method.
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