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You read in a newspaper that a company is going to renovate some school buildings in your local area that are in a poor condition. You would like to offer your help. Write a letter to the charity paying for the renovation.In your letter ● explain why you want to help with the renovations ● suggest what you can do to help ● say when you are available to start work

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Dear Sir, My name is Shikha, and I have been living in Acme Heights Society, Mohali for the
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 7 years. I have read in the Hindustan Times newspaper that you are going to renovate the buildings of the Wonder Play and Manav Rachna school which are in very bad condition. I am very glad that you took the initiative to help school children by providing them
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good place to play and study. I must say that these schools are in extremely poor condition
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 they do not have proper toilets, and not even proper whiteboards in the classrooms for teachers to explain things to their students.
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, I want to help you guys in renovating as I think it will help a lot of children in making their future better. I have a shop for building materials, so I can provide you with all the raw materials you need to renovate these places. I am ready to send you my labour employees too, who can help you in doing the work fast. I am available from
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 week onwards as I have no other contract with me. So, I can help you day in and day out. Looking forward to your reply so that I can contribute to
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 good cause. Yours Sincerely, Shikha
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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